Final pt1

            As human beings we are all incomplete and imperfect. Some of us are arrogant, ignorant or just cruel. As a child I had naïve thoughts that you could be a perfect human as long as you tried. The truth is if you are a certain character there will always be drawbacks. As I child I witness a horrible event that scarred my life and effected who I am today.

            I grew up in a terrible neighborhood in Atlanta Georgia. Most people I knew ended up in prison or dead. The schools were dirty and filled with future convicts and it was unlawful. I was hazed for being the only Korean every single day. I was compassionate and kind but also weak and ignorant to the real world. I was tried to help people and ended up getting hurt in the end but I kept trying. I thought the world would change if I tried my best to make the change. Yet, after  two years of trying I gave up and I changed. Nothing will ever change from kind words and compassion. To make things change you need power and money.

            The First case of this happened was when my father was beating my mother. I woke up to glass breaking and screaming. I walked down the stairs and saw my father harshly beating my mother. I was stupid and incompetent; I charged at my father and ended up unconscious with broken ribs. My point of the view of this harsh world turned cold and so did my character. After I was discharged from the hospital , I was angry at this cold sadistic world and I completely  changed into a different person. I stopped helping people and picking fights and was angry at different people for no reason. I was completely arrogant and sadistic. At that point I didn’t even know who I was anymore.

            I lost all my friends and my sister was scared of me and I was completely alone. Then I finally fell in love with someone. She brought out the best of me and she reminded of me who I truly was. I wasn’t cruel or arrogant. I was kind and compassionate but I also wasn’t weak or incompetent

Portfolio Essay

What is my favorite piece of work in the portfolio for my English class? My essay about my winter break was titled “Torture” was a essay about my hellish break. It was an hilarious piece of art that was fun to make and a lot of people found it amusing. I made my suffering and pain into an ironic essay that was funny. A fellow student commented “It was descriptive and emotion and I liked how I felt the anger flowing out of your essay” It also says that I am just like my Zodiac Gemini because my writing style can be very flexible like me. I can be very cold and retinol or be full of emotion and my writing reflects that.

What have you learned about yourself this year? I learned that I am a very flexible person and my writing shows that. For instance if I can’t shut down the opposite party with evidence and logic I will just do an extremely emotional appeal and win the sympathy of the audience. I also noticed that if I hate the topic it will be just based off facts but if I enjoy writing about the topic it will be very amusing or cold depending on the topic. I also competitive on topics if I am taunted and I can egotistic in my writing. I also can make my writing complex and I don’t like leaving half-finished essays. I tend to complete my pieces of art fast and just edit it multiple times.

At what have you improved in general? Is there any work that demonstrates this? I think my writing has improved a lot in general and my writing flows better because my grammar and vocabulary has increased a grade level. I can also use both of my writing styles effectively without making a complete mess. I also think my spelling has improved so I can modify my writing without wasting time on petty spelling mistakes like putting i after e. My vocab and grammar help make my sentences complex and intriguing. This allows my point of view and argument be descriptive while thus for directly reach my audience’s understanding.

What areas would you like to improve in? I honestly want a larger vocabulary so I can pull more words from. Having a large vocabulary makes the author seem more intelligent and makes your writing seem less repetitive. Also some words fit better in some situations improving your writing pieces flow. This is extremely nice because facts, empathy from the audience and looking smart is really hard to fight against.

            What do I want to with my writing? Honestly, I am very strong in English and it is one of my strongest subjects. But I want to be a cyber-defense specialist. Still writing will be an important skill because I need to make sure my college accepts me and convince them to give me a decent scholarship. Same for my job, even if I am extremely strong in my field of work, I still need to sway huge companies to hire me and believe that I am worth their money. I also need to make my clients to trust me and hire me. I also need them to spread the word that I am worth their money and they should hire me. I will always need writing in my life and so will you.